I sat next to Kriti’s bed.She started to wake up.I tried to call the doctor, but she told me not to.
“you were awake” I yelled crying
“Yeah I guess”she finally said
“I wish I could trade places with you.Do you know how much it hurt’s me,to see you like this”
“Karthik?”
“Hmm! “ Her voice bothered me.I took a deep breath
“I love you” She whispered
“I love you too”
“Tell my parents that I love them and promise you’ll never forget me .Promise me” She started crying.
“What! Stop you can’t leave me”
“I love you Karthik” she cried as she closed her eyes
“No! don’t leave me!” I panicked and yelled louder
Her dad ran in to the room, when he heard the moniter went flat.I ran out of the way as doctors and nurses rushed to Kriti’s side.
My love of life has left me all alone in this world.
38 nice people who replied back:
Is this real ?
touCHING!!!!!!
Lehari
It isn't real, it's fiction
thanks for the read :)
Madhumathi thank you :)
meghana yeah it's pure fiction , Thanks for the read..keep visiting :)
Spellbound by simple yet bigger impact of your post! Great work!
nice story :)
That is a nice read:)
'“I love you Karthik” she cried as she closed her eyes'
These lines gave me shivers.
Even though I haven't experienced something like this ever, I could still feel it.
I think that's one excellent post:)
@Amar Thanks bro.., Welcome to my blog :)
Keep visiting
painful yet perfect..!
Gowthami thank you a million :D
Very touching, very moving. Bravo!!
Amar--> Thanks bro :) welcome to my blog
Maniac-->Thank you :) Keep Visiting :)
Priyanka--> thank you.. u made my day :)
deadman--> thanks bro Keep Visiting :)
Hi Anuroop...
You have some work to do..
visit ma blog here
http://myblogmyviews-gowthami.blogspot.com/2011/05/first.html
Smile,
Gowthami
I actually thought it was real. You scared me.
I love the way your write!
Nidhi
Thank you :)
Gowthami
Hey! that was really so sweet of you.., thanks a lot for the award :)
This is short but CRAAZZILLYY beautiful. :)
Thank you aishwarya :)
so real yet it can't be.. purely true :) Thanks for following News not making news.
rachitlifestyle.blogspot.com
Nice one! I liked those well penned lines .Very touching..First time here and thoroughly enjoyed my coming.
dude ... u r slowly turnin out to becum a perfect scene writer ... !!! try writin a play... i shall make that as a short movie :) :) :)
grt work ..goosebumps !!
truly touchin mama...description z too gud, more on feel than on mattr...brainy stuff...lykd it a zillion :):):)
Truly Touching.
Love the blog.
:)
Rachit
thanks bro!
Ashwini
Thanks for dropping by.
pavan
he he! sure mama. I was planning too. Let's make one short movie.
Sankeerth
Thanks mama.Glad you liked it.
J
thanks for stopping by. Welcome to my blog. :)
Hey,my first time on ur blog :D
I was just going to say sorry but then I read it's fiction ..Could've fooled me! Loved the post!!
Super awesome...
Loved it.
felt sad for the tragic end.if it is fiction thoughts could be expressed more efficiently
it's very touchy...brought tears in my eyes.... It's good that it's a work of fiction.... Nice post!!!
Nice post....
Drama queen --> I abandoned my blog long back, so couldn't reply soon
Glad you liked it.
Keep coming back
Indira >> Hi, Thanks for the comment.yes! I second that, i should have written more elaborately.will try to impress you next time
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Sneha -> hey you made my day. glad you liked it
Rajendra --> thanks mate.. Keep coming back
Beautifully narrated! :)
At least she could say a proper good bye!
Good one.
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